Tequille's essay was amazing because it flowed seamlessly into each topic. It also highlighted the dual nature of her character, making her more dynamic. Despite being a premed student by day, she is a stripper by night. He could have easily stereotyped her as the regular stripper, but the fact that the essay also explored both sides, made it less biased and less stereotypical. This is effective when he mentions that being a stripper has given her time management skills. Thus, the essay is not static and has different perspectives.
There's a common theme, reinforced by the detail of her wearing different wigs each day. This further develops the theme by exposing the different aspects or layers of characters. Moreover, the theatrical name of "Gold Fox" is connected seamlessly with her appearance, making the essay less genetic. He explains the name came from her golden skin color and the blonde wigs that she would wear. There's also an analogy with wonder woman. Thus, the connection between the wigs and her appearance is quite interesting.
He also talked about a scene in which she was dancing, without being vulgar. The description enveloped the reader in the scene. But, perhaps it would have been better if instead of placing that scene near the end of the essay, he would have done it at the beginning so as to lure the reader in.
The conclusion could be stronger despite stating that she is not put off by the degrading nature of her job, but by her teachers finding out. Maybe he should go back to the previous scene and connect the two.
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